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Good Deeds Undone

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Thu, 2015-08-20 07:43

I often don't feel loved
Fiery judgement from above
Awaits those who prejudge.

False witnesses won't budge
Always eating fudge
Wolves in sheep clothing they judge.

I stay to myself; I feel alone
With God there's peace
He comforts me.

The way you tell it, I'm not so bright
You're never wrong and I'm never right.

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I revamped this poem to eliminate grammar errors. How did I do?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Thu, 2015-08-20 19:29

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A good write on the ones that judge and live in glass houses.
Great to read and flows well, take care and know we think of you,
Yours Ian xx
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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2015-08-21 12:08

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Thanks appreciate the read and critique

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Esker

Thu, 2015-10-15 01:40

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others I want too kick in the butt..
but sooner or later I get mine kicked too
like your down to earth poetry
spelled out the way it is...

thank U!

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2015-10-16 16:51

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Thanks for the read and comment. I'm updating and revising my poetry for grammar errors. This new brain training app is helping me remember syntax, word meaning in writing and some others.

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