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A Girl Eating Stew (April Contest)
There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing else to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls had closed,
so she went instead to the zoo
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Keith Logan
Mon, 2016-04-04 06:48
I like
this logical lass. Indeed, who can blame her?
Keith Logan
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2016-04-04 20:39
Lol
Thanks glad you like it
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alidzain
Mon, 2016-04-04 22:18
Hi Barbara
I liked this but I find that it doesn't stick to the rules of the contest which are
1. Anapestic
2.5 lines
3. Rhyming pattern AABBA.
Alid
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2016-04-05 07:38
Oh
Thanks don't know much about limericks.
I worked on AABBA and five lines
How is my anaspest
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alidzain
Tue, 2016-04-05 13:50
Hi Barbara
to be honest, I don't think I'm the right person to ask. All I know about anapest is its pattern
(unstress, unstress, stress)
I've seen the examples from the contest's instructions but I can't see the anapestic rhythm.
Alid
raj
Tue, 2016-04-05 13:55
Hi Barbara
i liked this one...i believe it's posted as a limerick and not anapest and it made me smile ...
If I may suggest, you could add a few words to make it flo even more smoothly...just a suggestion..
There was a girl eating stew,
she had nothing [else] to do
standing outside in the cold
all the malls was [had just] closed,
so she went [instead] to the zoo.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2016-04-05 22:19
Thanks raj
I like it
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2016-04-05 22:23
Ok
Thanks
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2016-04-18 15:01
Thanks chompy
Sounds good I like it
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