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Forever Somewhere

If I close my eyes the memory's vivid -
screeching, circling, circling, screeching.
Overhead and all around is turbulence and chaos and turbulence
in a hellish cacophony that splits the night,
the night they came to caution me.

For no rational reason
an insidious seeping of terror and awe
slowly carried black, dank thoughts of impending doom
to exponentially darken the core of my centre

I did not then know who,
but I knew.

The Aborigine say the curlew cries the warning of death.

~

The canvas stretches and twists, did you know?

Carefully and impersonally they raped my soul,
uttered the Great Lie, stripped my heart from its breast;
unenlightened, unaware they were messengers from the profound
instinctively playing the role cast on their star's blueprint,
they told the equivocation with such conviction as to bury Knowledge.

I sank into an aberration of sightless oblivion.
In sticky viscous darkness I heard bloodcurdling denial,
felt the filmy fingers of transparent veils
that hide the confusion
of what is not really there behind the abomination
of the masked masquerade of things manifest.

I thought I would stay forever tasting the appalling aroma,
and breathing the fetid fear of the black nothingness of not knowing.

~

He entreated with a small, soft voice,
barely perceived in the quiet empty void
of mournful devastation.
Hovering, hidden, he manipulated every disbelieving crack,
to demonstrate tiny miracles
and whisper cryptic words
of kaleidoscopic wisdom
afire with the pungent knowledge of continuation.

He walked with me through
the relentless seeking of the malnourished,
steering my footsteps
from high windy cliffs of weeping worlds and words of despair,
to the sights and senses of manifest's gifts
interlocking with evermore in the eternal now
which is all there isn't
and is.

Then one morning I woke to harmonic birds' chorus;
variegation gliding through a cloudless sun birth;
a joyous dawn rousing to dance and symphony
and in the new day's air I sensed first light.

So I sat in stillness, to seek or escape, and felt golden warmth white-wax my soul.
A twilight journey; a tunnel travelled
and I touched Truth

as he casually strolled into the cosmos of my psyche,
mocking the Great Lie,
proving to me
we are forever somewhere in the timelessness of now.

~

He stayed until he thought I'd stopped missing him,
until it seemed I was ready
to not notice him leave.
But when I look back, I remember a moment when
my heart felt a fluttering hiccup heave,
of which I took such little regard -
being busy smelling a rose at the time.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Comments

This is such a haunting piece of writing, i've read this twice now and i can't make up my mind whether i should be downbeat or enlightend by this poem. No crits as i think i will be reading this again and again, i really enjoyed your poem and shall return. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

for the so supportive comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

do please read my comment to Bearegard
the management lady

loved

you've written a couple of epics in the time i've known you :)
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

I must have,
if you say so
but read my comments too
you'd love them too.

posted below for your reach

I have always told friends poets communicate in verse what

others convey in pages
since ages
and speakers mouth wash
till their teeth fall out
so shorter a poem ...
more meaningful tis
and
in fewer words you can spill..

hope you agree
or
lets agree
to disagree ...

sorry
you are the management
to lay down norms..
tc rgds

loved

that you think the write is too long...
isn't that what you mean?
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

yes sorry though

loved

The metaphors and imagery flowed such as to drain your pen! We all flounder about without a clue until we find our own personal truth............stan

lol stan, does that mean i can't write any more stuff?

i'll say thanks for the review, but still not sure what you thought of it lol
love judy
xx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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my comments must be starting to be as obscure as my writing lol. I Liked it is what I meant........stan

This I shall take this away and digest, I know the background, I think,
and it has that intensity that you put in your book, you are still feeling
intense about it I am sure. Empathy comes to you from me...

annanya

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

intensity?
i can re-live the intensity of anything i have experienced in order to write about it....
but it doesn't mean that i still feel that way - if you know what i mean

love judyanne
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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