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Feeling Frisky

I'm feeling frisky
Can we be a bit risky?
find some little alcove
and share our love
I've never been so brave
but you, right now, I crave
Is that a sound of condemnation?
No, cos here you are at my work station
You say "I need you to do some filing"
I outwardly moan but can't stop smiling
never has it felt so right
can't wait for more afternoon delight

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Structured: Western
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LOL This good, but I think lines 3 & 4 need a re-write. "alcove" is real hard to rhyme!

Nice one.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Hi Jim
thanks for enjoying this little one but keeping in line with this poem instead of alcove I immediately thought of nook and won't tell u what I rhymed with that lol have a gr8 day x

author comment

LOL!!!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

as well as invitation

well done
hope he came

loved

thanks loved he came lol x

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i knew he must have
this was just a confirmation

loved

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