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Feeling Frisky

Submitted by sueb on Tue, 2012-12-11 16:25

I'm feeling frisky
Can we be a bit risky?
find some little alcove
and share our love
I've never been so brave
but you, right now, I crave
Is that a sound of condemnation?
No, cos here you are at my work station
You say "I need you to do some filing"
I outwardly moan but can't stop smiling
never has it felt so right
can't wait for more afternoon delight

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Comments

Race_9togo

Wed, 2012-12-12 02:56

Hi Sue

LOL This good, but I think lines 3 & 4 need a re-write. "alcove" is real hard to rhyme!

Nice one.

Respectfully, Race

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sueb

Wed, 2012-12-12 04:56

Hi Jim

Hi Jim
thanks for enjoying this little one but keeping in line with this poem instead of alcove I immediately thought of nook and won't tell u what I rhymed with that lol have a gr8 day x

author comment

Race_9togo

Wed, 2012-12-12 05:18