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THE DEVIL MAN

Submitted by Geremia on Sun, 2012-04-01 13:27

THE DEVIL MAN

She gave her soul
to the old Devil man.
She was only twenty
And when she called
him honey
He gave her plenty.

She gave out
He gave in
It’s all about money
The world turns that way
Now ain’t it so’
Honey ?

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geremia

Sun, 2012-04-01 15:00

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Thanks, will add ? My poetry is m Svengali. :)

joe

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wesley snow

Sun, 2012-04-01 22:03

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... you are positively boring for me around here. Nothing to fix, nothing to change. The occasional disagreement on Greek mythology and that's it. That's all you offer this poor mentor/workshop leader/teacher. If you ever need someone to edit your work, I'm your man. I'd just sign off on everything as being "polished draft" and go home. Probably wouldn't even have to read the stuff.
wesley

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Geremia

Mon, 2012-04-02 00:05

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Thanks, Wes. Too late for editing job. I'm already on my second book :)

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loved

Mon, 2012-04-02 02:32

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and edit
at least 51 poems out of 8000 ie
====51/8000
someone ???
volunteers needed

ALL PROFITS IF ANY GO TO THE CANCER SOCIETY

loved

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