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Alien’s humans

Alien’s humans
But we are not yet established as aliens
once we are able to make a city
on Moon and Mars
also get used to the atmosphere there
after many, many die in thin air
then when we establish
that we can establish,

a very bright lad like someone
okay like me, will say
see I told you we all are aliens by the way
so till then do stay
yes accept we may have been
once upon a times aliens

loitering just by the universes side way
within a dark tunnel in time
they call a holocaust ….
maybe we all were truly then cast!

if I compose any more than this
you will call me an epicurial
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Hurry up and pick a side,
as we are running out of patience with you humons.
You have desecrated a beautiful world with your greed.
Time to choose sides, love you all, your favourite alien.
A D Juster, Second star on the right and on till dawn..
Not one of my favourite writes..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

sad you did not like it
now u have set a trend of dislikes
no one else will read this

so I have to act as an alien
and delete it

Wait some other alien is knocking
shall go and meet
till then enjoy my other sweet

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don't you dare erase this one it is part of the whole, the theme is different and can be expanded but it is your work.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

what a relief
AH!
HAHAHahahhaaa
I wasn't going to anyway

Thanks for the dare
you make me fight bare
and of course fair!

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Senryu for you:-
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Loved you are so bad.
But a good poet all the same
Some do know your name..
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Just have a great day and a great sense of humour.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Ian you are so good
everyone would wish you
so does this bard loved

is it okay sir!

7 5 7

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but I won't say this is a bad poem. Its quite unique in its own way.

Alid

off the cuff poet
by now u ought to know
friend ur wonderful
traditional

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