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deep hurt

A deep hurt!

at times my heart weeps,
though rarely
when I see machinations
manifested in crooked minds,
seeking the fish from under the Dead Sea
when all are asleep,
wantonly
and
in pity seek a false admiration
to reach out for empathy,
callous folks still exist
I hate to say
but still

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very much relate to this . Palestine , syria and many other places are suffering and we can't do anything but weeping.
Thanks for sharing.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

to relate to this
at some time of one's life
as much as you do tooo

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this is a poem where your unique writing
style really works.
so often, for me, it doesn't...sorry

the first thing that struck me about this, was
the sense of honesty it contains.
after reading this, there was no doubt in my mind
you meant what you wrote. and, you've expressed
those feelings cohesively, and eloquently

it's a sentiment that could be felt about a
myriad of situations the world over

i very much enjoyed this
thank you

cheers
p

grateful thanks

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Just like reading a quatrain from some well known Doctor, A little puzzlig but the truth of things that will and do happen.
Well written young Bard, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

each word you relay Ian
thanks

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But the last line sucks. But still what? 'But still' means nothing. You could do better.

cheers,
Jess
Everything changes bar one. Neopoet's 'Prime Directive'-
"Critique don't comment".
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I shall fill in the gap
you visualise
still!

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