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D R I Z Z L E

binary sequential
this glide of seconds
in a slow blink

chorus
of shadows
behind the screen

the dark satin worlds
thoughtlands
bending like a head wind
in dune grasses
and naked dark seas
dancing with the froth of
clouds misted
and cool

perforations
of light
penetrating
soft as a touch

tender remonstrances
stipple
edged

dancing in the sprinkler
puddles
an upside down day
bejewelled
like a fallen crown

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Your lines strike especially that last stanza, the last three lines

"an upside down day
 bejewelled
 like a fallen crown"

Would I ever be able to suggest anything to improve? I doubt. 

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the light on all sharp brilliance
the dark in its velvet deep

moving on the wheels
finding hard corners to wheel
the inertia load
crazy strong and pulling
like a storm wind

bending linear arrivals
to forgotten destinations....

Thank You for understanding
the poem...
on this difficult Friday
it means a lot!

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