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D R I Z Z L E
binary sequential
this glide of seconds
in a slow blink
chorus
of shadows
behind the screen
the dark satin worlds
thoughtlands
bending like a head wind
in dune grasses
and naked dark seas
dancing with the froth of
clouds misted
and cool
perforations
of light
penetrating
soft as a touch
tender remonstrances
stipple
edged
dancing in the sprinkler
puddles
an upside down day
bejewelled
like a fallen crown
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Rula
Fri, 2013-09-06 15:49
Steve
Your lines strike especially that last stanza, the last three lines
"an upside down day
bejewelled
like a fallen crown"
Would I ever be able to suggest anything to improve? I doubt.
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Esker
Fri, 2013-09-06 15:23
through the day submerged in thought
the light on all sharp brilliance
the dark in its velvet deep
moving on the wheels
finding hard corners to wheel
the inertia load
crazy strong and pulling
like a storm wind
bending linear arrivals
to forgotten destinations....
Thank You for understanding
the poem...
on this difficult Friday
it means a lot!