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Cowboy Up

a talker not a thinker
no faster than a drinker
wild wests
rattle snakes
put movement on the blinker


spurred boots and grit
hang onto that shit
an appaloosa's
coming soon
to chomp the bloody bit

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I'm new and wish to learn so please be ruthless
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Comments amost camo coat
the free loaded light armor
of cav the spanish brought
with them

the working class
and enrich gain feed by
the imperical and colonial

that enliven some
beneath the hide
but lest denounce
the finish
with wear
the gloss
a dull sheen

in practise
the moves
and intuition rides

Greatly admire
the gritty write
like the knowledge
of the natives not
using a bit far back
just commands and
feet and leg prompts

I like the switch up
on the opening lines
Ive met both
and been

a feisty write
Works well for me

Thank You!

thanks Esker, your in-depth analysis added some extra understandings for me. love the Spanish cavalry info . . . peace

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