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Don’t Disregard the Voices

Submitted by Simon Smythe on Tue, 2015-01-20 18:59

Simple Simon
Crazy Joe
The Merry Trickster
Aunty Flo
tow the line
until it hurts
throw a spanner
in the works
cut the flower
for the show
leave the bloom
and watch it grow
crank the handle’s
overdrive
disconnect
the whole bee hive
paint snot drying
fast enough
where’s the fire
what’s the rush

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Sparrow

Tue, 2015-01-20 19:20

Simon

Loved this one it was fast and had a great flow, Yours, Ian.

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Rula

Wed, 2015-01-21 03:13

each one is

unique in a way.
The title fits well there.
I really like it Simon.
Thank you.

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Geezer

Wed, 2015-01-21 07:27

I loved...

the fast pace and the excellent rhyme and near rhyme! I don't think that it could be better! ~ Gee

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weirdelf

Sat, 2016-12-24 16:13

Yep, like the others said.

Something prompted me to check out your profile and
"About me:
read my poems and find out"
Is less generous than your poetry, perhaps a tad arrogant.

cheers,
Jess
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Don’t Disregard the Voices