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CLICKITY-CLACK
Some sickie took the clickity-clack
out of the new railroad tracks
It was bad enough they took away
the red caboose
Why can't they leave well enough alone?
I liked things the way they were
Clickity-clack, clickity-clack
coming down the railroad track
blowing that lonesome, wailing whistle
that I love to hear sing out to all
Telling us "hello", "goodbye
as it passes by in the night
Mr. Engineer, blow that whistle
one more time
and let those wheels go click and clack
all the way there and back
Last few words:
ok, so it's whimpy. but I heard the train go through town last night, and it reminded me of my childhood fear of the trains whistle. A sound that I fine very comforting now.
You just can't be brilliant all the time. sometimes you just gotta be you.
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Cloudthings
Sun, 2012-05-06 21:42
Hi Linda, I would say whimsy, not wimpy
Hi Linda, I would say whimsy, not wimpy... I got a good chuckle & I think you'll find it has romantic or at least nostalgic cheer & appeal, added to the mirth factor, I reckon it has appeal in quite a few ways.
Cheers
Anni
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
scribbler
Sun, 2012-05-06 23:41
hello
Always have liked poems with trains. Now prof. Holliday will explain why there's less clickety clack in the track than there used to be. Steel rails used to be about 60 feet long and it's the point where each joins that produces the sound. Now the new rails are 440 Yards long! fewer joints...less clickety.......end of unwanted lecture lol. PS poem got better and better as it went along...............stan
Linda Moses
Mon, 2012-05-07 02:38
Stan
I knew it has something to do with the joints, but I did not know that it is now 440 yardsl Thank you so much for reading. your comments are appreciated.
Linda
He who conquers self , has won a great battle
author commentCloudthings
Mon, 2012-05-07 03:52
Yep, Prof... it's all about the journey!
Yep, Prof... it's all about the journey!
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
Linda Moses
Mon, 2012-05-07 02:35
Anni
thank you so much for reading and your kind comments. The hello, goodbye part was my great aunt tell me not to be afraid, the train was telling us hello goodbye as it went through town. We lived in small town, and when the train woke me up it scared ,me.
Sincerely, Linda
He who conquers self , has won a great battle
author commentNordic cloud
Mon, 2012-05-07 16:24
Oh I too miss that as we had
Oh I too miss that as we had a record that had a
humourist who used this as his between-words-sound,
only I would call it diddlider diddlider.
We had the level crossing up the hill from our house, when I was a child,
the freight train used to stop there for the paper mill,
and the carriages would knock against each other
ricochetting down the line, then shunt forward and stop,
to shunt back again, never seeming to make up their mind
which way they were going.
My sister and I would listen in our half sleep,
its part of my childhood and awakes memories of it.
They were chuffer trains, steam engines, then of course.
Wonderful beasts.
This poem is one that children would enjoy too,
wouldn't they Linda? It has the rhythm and character that fits them well,
the child in us reacts to that!
Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Linda Moses
Tue, 2012-05-08 00:07
Ann
Yes, I agree about the children enjoying it. I like writing childrens poetry, and have several written. Whille I was writing it, I kept wanting to sing it mentally, and even when I read it out loud to myself, it seemed it needed to be sung.
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Thanks, Linda
He who conquers self , has won a great battle
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