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Christmas Cookies... [December contest]

"When the ghost of Christmas future
Sat down next to me
I was just a little startled
Almost spilled my @#&*ing tea!"

He said; Yo man,get a grip
I had to stop, I felt the need
This Covid stuff's a bitch
Ya got some real good weed?

"I was just about to roll one
Boy, this night has been a blast
I was visited by your brothers
The Present and the Past"

"I didn't want to see behind me
I was a lonely kid
I didn't want to see it
But he made sure I did"

"So I baked some Magic Cookies
To take away the pain
Have a couple, it's on me"

"Hope he don't come back again" [aside]

"Have a snack, celebrate the future
But no more rides tonight..."

No, you're good, my man
These cookies make me bright

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Structured: Western
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Comments

You managed to pack so much in, and Covid and cookies excellent stuff. These ghosts can really bring gloom and doom but also a help in hand. A wonderful addition Dear Geezer. I love every stanza.

Thank you...Teddy

I wrote this to be short and in the contest. I am working at a much longer one, and will post it in a couple of days. It goes beyond the three ghosts and I hope that it will be as funny as it's going to be long. Maybe I will post it as a series, ya know?
This is great fun and something to take my mind off this Covid stuff. Glad you had a chuckle. ~ Geez.
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you could post in a series and add together at the end, like i did on the seven sins, that was a really fun way to do it! anyway how ever you post it i shall look forward to reading, your work always gives me a good laugh but the cow one will always be my upmost favourite poem of all time, i still chuckle thinking about it.

Thank you...Teddy

the cow one is one of my favorites too. Cows are such comical creatures. Thank you for your support, I'm glad to give a laugh whenever you need one. ~ Geez.
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Excellent poem Geezer! I really liked the last two stanzas too. After reading this, I'm going to have to seriously rethink my toll house cookies recipe...

Michael Anthony

Hi Geez, I've had a good laugh, thank you, I needed it. I fancy Santa having weed...lol. Yes, one tries to forget about the past and nowadays not even think of the future. But your poem, nonetheless, is full of cheer. The rhyming is excellent, as usual. So is the title, spacing and all else.
I think it's too soon to wish people a happy Xmas, so just keep safe, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

with so little space. Have to think it's rather inconclusive, but the personality you give Christmas Future is so vivid and fun (as compared to Dickens frightening character! :O) and fitting to our times, he almost feels more human than ghost.
Which could be a good thing. Then again, it could be a bad one. *shrugs*
I like your title very much and think it fits perfectly. Just had a brain wave, though. What about 'A Cooke for Your Thoughts'?
It'd be easier to read if you had quotation-marks around what 'I' says.
All in all, a very fun, quirky poem. You got the modern-twist part of the prompt spot-on!
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