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christmas

The near full moon
hangs
pregnant
bright
on this starry Christmas-eve night

I think of the young Mary
about to labour the pain of creation
and hold her new babe

oblivious
to future agony
.

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It strike me as incredible apposite that a foreign being implants itself in a human being then emerges to try and take over the species, teehee.

The last 2 lines almost make this a Christmas poem worth writing and reading.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

your cynicism is showing jess
thanks for the read and comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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as usual painted really well!

Do you really need the "the" before Young Mary?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

and yes - i think i do need the 'the'
- it (imo) stresses 'the mary', not just any mary if you know what i mean?

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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i wish mary read how you summerised all her travails in on poet short brief,

so lovely to see you
thanks so much for the kind comments
love judy
\xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

Well presented. Steeped in Catholicism one would never look at it that way. Or is it just me? Would like to know your religious belief

lol - i would like to know my religious beliefs :)

thanks for the kind comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

i didn't see this earlier
thank you very much me lud for the kind comment
love judd
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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