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burning candle flame! (live visual..)

burning candle flame!
(live visual..)

she is like a candle
cold but very still
held in a lovers hand
so very still ...
till she is lit and flame starts flickering,
she flickers,flickers too
but slowly ,silently...

her body curvaceous
wriggles within
the arms of her consort
now she can’t slip out…

the flame warms up gradually
the wax begins to melt
lover her lips does cement
with breezes

he softly does blow
to make her brightness glow

as the wax
warms and melts
she can’t take a chance
to wiggle or wriggle
she collapses
in his arms

is ready to be molded
as per his will,

she also is no longer still!

Rest imagine what happens
if you will!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

Raw! Inviting! Where does he go from here?

Scott

Your writing poetry again ;) I also want to know more, there should be more to this one ... I liked this, with a little work it will be a wonderful poem

love Jayne-Chloe x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

your contribution will be welcome

loved

author comment

burning candle flame!
(live visual..)

she is like a candle
cold but very still
held in a lovers hand
so very still ...
till she is lit and flame starts flickering,
she flickers,flickers too
but slowly ,silently...

her body curvaceous
wriggles within
the arms of her consort
now she can’t slip out…

the flame warms up gradually
the wax begins to melt
lover her lips does cement
with breezes

he softly does blow
to make her brightness glow

as the wax
warms and melts
she can’t take a chance
to wiggle or wriggle
she collapses
in his arms

is ready to be molded
as per his will,

she also is no longer still!

Rest imagine what happens
if you will!

loved

author comment

that reads much better :) its more polished for sure, I am off to read the springy poem lol

love Jayne-Chloe

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

really without you I won't be able to move an inch ,
nay a metre/meter

loved

author comment
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