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Broken News

Oh fuck it all, I’ve had enough
Of all this dreadful, made up stuff
Love me, lust me, look away -
Write the headline of the day-

We all sup at the greedy trough
Where politicians scowl and growl -
Panting with displeasure -

While women dressed in black and grey
Mash their mouths with viscous lips
And snarl once more, into the fray,
High heels clicking with intent -
‘Let’s find the truth and make it bent!’

All these zombies and the living dead
Jerked alive by sex and cash!
This wee scandal - or maybe that -
Such a lot of quack-quack-quack,
‘He’s wrong, she’s wrong, I never did that!’

The squeal and screech is over-strident
The lies, the comedy of writhing
Sexual perversion, an intimate fondling
This business deal, an ‘ethical’ warning.

Truth is a malformed word it seems,
The cursed stuff of passing dreams,
A tattered remnant of a story,
The rawness of some death or scene

Broken by the morning.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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I know I am up against tough competition here! Good luck everyone!
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Comments

This is a perfect depiction of the world as it is today, I wish you good luck in the competition.

It's a really well written poem I loved it!!

Brava!!

Hugs

Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thank you, Seren - very much. I wish the world was nicer, kinder, gentler.... I really enjoyed writing this one. My oldest son is a journalist working overseas, and he was given a assignment to see if he could track down what was 'fake/fake' news, what was 'fake, with a tidbit of truth' (distorted), and reality. It didn't end well!
Now, I'm off to look and immerse myself in your poems...
xxx Jenifer

Jenifer Jaspa James

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I was challenged by this title myself, and having trouble finding the words and theme to break. I agree with Seren, this is well-written and I applaud your offering! The rhyme and near rhyme are very good and the internal logic is well done,
leading to a good ending. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thank you, wonderful man. As I wrote to Seven, it was fun to write. I have had to become a bloody minded politically aware person out of necessity. And oh gosh, what a landscape of strange politics we live in. Oh well, words, words, words!

Jenifer Jaspa James

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Your poem is brilliant, your persepctive on what we are told/see/learn is exactly that, the political persepctive, but today we can never be certain about the truth and the lies.
Your poem gave me the sense of frustration and cynicism towards those in power and those in pursuit of power whilst every day we hear scandal and delusion with a large serving of manipulation. Well done, I enjoyed your poem. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Thank you, Ruby. I really appreciate your comments - politics give me the shits at the moment. I tried to put this one to music but it didn't quite work, which was equally frustrating. have you ever tried to do something like that? would love to see it.

Jenifer Jaspa James

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