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Braking Bad...

Tablets for pain
side dish of vitamins
Washed down with decaf

Rice Krispies upon arising
The furnace isn’t working well
the exhaust is blocked with waste

Near drowning with water
suffocated with medicinal fumes
lassitude rides toward the setting sun

Feeding time, feeling better
Crazy scenarios in little red tubes
Head full of jelly beans dispensed by T.V.

Asleep at the wheel
no one is driving at all
Hands not steering, head in the lap

Faster downhill
No brakes on the slope
On the way to a dead-end

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Loved this one, but get a grip, to hell with torturing your system with food you don't like, laugh at the water as it will always find its own level, even if it is halfway up the wall of your basement lol,
Better to go up hill it is more of a challenge, lol, so we roll back sometimes, great it teaches us.
OK it is fiction, and a great story Remember Killer will be waiting at the bottom of the hill to pick up the pieces, Yours Ian.T He He

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Just wish that my body was as good as his. Maybe I should turn cannibal? Just kidding! Thanks for stopping by,~ Gee

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Human...tastes like chicken? What does Killer think?

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

that Ian is right, humans taste like pork. Killer is contemplating the idea of killing the neighbor upstairs. Not sure if he will eat her though. He has plenty of meat left over from his last kill. He's just sick of all the B.S. and to borrow a quote from the Raven; he figures that he will have to deal with her. "Nevermore"!
Thanks for stopping by, ~ Gee

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Human...tastes like chicken? What does Killer think?

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Humons taste like pork.
If you cook them long enough
you need just a fork.

Unless you want to wait a week or two
Then all you can make is a good stew

La La Gyps fulvus

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

My laugh for the day!!! Thank you Ian!!! I really do enjoy your humor. Nevermore isn't into eating humans, just likes "messing" with the dead, if you know what I mean. Have you read my newest one? The Lament of A Female Serial Killer?? Check it out if you have a moment.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

If you cook them much too long
The flavor gets a bit too strong
You need to add a little spice
Bake in the oven, it comes out nice.

Mashed potatoes and some gravy
Veggies too, don't be lazy
When at last the table's set
Say the grace, don't forget

Thank the powers that may be
That made the bad ones, he and she
Now dig in, this dish is new
Clean your plate, it's good for you!

Thanks Ian, ~ Gee

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