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The Blink (edited earlier post)
When does the end begin?
A child is born,
The blink of an eye
Taken at a ripe old age
The end is with you
From the start.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
original:
"When does the end begin?
You'll never win,
the end is with you
from the start"
Editing stage:
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Comments
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2010-12-20 17:55
Shirley
Yes, Yes and Yes!!
thank you
Always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
mand
Mon, 2010-12-20 03:33
Hello Eduarlo
Born to die - make the most of life while we have it, cos it goes in the blink of an eye.
Profound and thought provoking.
Love Mand xxxxxx
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2010-12-20 17:57
mand
thank you so much and to you also,
Yes, Yes, and Yes!!
Always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Hooded Stranger
Fri, 2010-12-24 18:49
Eddie
Eddie,
I really liked this piece. It reminded me of a poem by China Blue called 'Shooting Star' which gave the thought that we are dying from the minute we are born...your piece also gave me that thought:
http://new.neopoet.com/node/302
I guess that outlook is a little depressing, but it is true.
Thanks for sharing this one my friend,
HS
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