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A Blind Eye
Just as there's sour in a lemon
and, that lemon makes a tart,
that is, after it's been baked,
but, before the "bite" does start;
just like milk comes in a bottle
and butter, in small cubes
you can turn a blind eye
but, we're going down the tubes.
Like the wind in fall, or autumn
embarrasses the tees,
by making all their "clothes" fall off
and, land around their knees;
I've seen good folks throw good money
after distinct, political "boobs";
you can throw a blind eye
but, we're going down the tubes.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
the_fool
Wed, 2011-12-14 23:36
a piece called 'blind eye' in
a piece called 'blind eye' in the undiscovered section for almost a year? sorry, had to say it.
i really like the tempo on this one and i'm surprised it's gone unnoticed. it seemed like a very light build up to the last twos S's. the quotations on clothes could be removed, too.
a little polishing, but a keeper for sure.