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Aussieland is Calling...

I'd like to live down-under
In Aussieland by the sea
With wallabies and waves of thunder
And Eucalyptus trees

The Outback filled with the songs
Of Kookaburra birds
And frog-filled billabongs
Grasslands and kangaroo herds

I'd listen through the night
To Aboriginal didgeridoos
Watch the sun come up bright
Look for spiders in my shoes

Ahhhh, the call of the wild
The Outback calling me
Me, a nature-child
A regular Croc Dundee

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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Gee, I can only say that I wanted more especially between the last 2 stanzas.
This is really great,,

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I was wondering; would it be better if I said in the first stanza: Australia, instead of Aussieland? ~ Geez.
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seems more formal than Aussieland. I like the friendly flair of Aussieland more. It's a fine poem with it's light-hearted appeal. Nicely done!

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

The informal light-hearted approach is definitely what I am going for. My Aussie friends are pleased with my work and say that I hit it right on! ~ Geez.
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"Aussieland", every time, and I would advocate more colloquiums,
more earthy, in your face Australian couldn't care less language.
this is really good, worth working on.

Obi.

I kinda want to keep it like it is, to keep the "average reader", [not an Aussie] from tripping over themselves in trying to understand colloquiums. This is easy for the everyday reader to understand, with just basic knowledge of Australia. ~ Geez.
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