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An Acrostic Poem (first poet's workshop)

Those birds I ponder near my house
Have holes in trees as flitter mouse,
Except they flitter through the day.

Such grating songs they always play,
Part cuckoo screeches calling loud,
All arrogance and preening proud.
Right rudely do they guard the nests-
Rough arguments; effusive pests.
Oh, sparrows are a noisome bunch
When break my fast and spoil my lunch.

And when of wind they might run dry,
Nowhere is there a silent sigh.
Damn chickadees now chide and bitch.

The rant is as a scratchless itch.
Hell hath no music like their “song”.
Eccentric ghosts of fools gone wrong?

Condemn me to this sentence cruel!
High note and low, while on the stool,
I ever must endure the wail.
Cacophony of Cosmic scale
Kills love of nature’s keen delight.
All breeds of bird engage to fight.
Don’t get me wrong, aggression moves
Each passive creature and improves
Each generation in due course.

A crow will fight a hawk perforce
Resulting in a stronger house.
E’en sparrows will a pecking louse

Molest when more than wood he seeks,
Although ‘tis when to nests he peeks
That chickadees become aroused.
In this is nature’s wisdom housed.
Not though, in couplings base, unmeet.
God turns his ear from blended tweet.

In hovels of the maple tree
Not one, but count too vast to see,
The birds are hatching half breed spawn!
Enough! The deed leaves Gaea thrawn!
Revolting is the hybrid deed.
An action that perverts the seed.
Chicks half and half and in same nest.
Indeed, this makes an evil pest.
Alright, I’ve had my racist rant.
Look not for me in black currant.
Look not for me where they might sing.
You have to know I hate the spring.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is my third poem, my first foray into a structured form and one of the worst things I have written. I will never try an acrostic poem again. It needs the edits pen worse than anything I have produced, but I didn't touch it. Woe is me. I couldn't muster the desire to do so anyway. Please don't concern yourselves with being kind. However, the subject is real. They are breeding together until I have more hybrids than pure breds.
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Comments

but not in the ways you might think. I was mostly bothered by utterly incongruous words in there.

I know you said no changes but one of its values is that it doesn't read like an acrostic (I can usually spot them at fifty paces at dusk from the forced word choices). So change the title to "Nature Perverse" or "Gaia's Shame" or even "The Sad and Shameful Tale of the Sparrow and the Chickadee" with ever mentioning acrostic and see how many notice.

I'm loving 'Poet's First Poems', we've come a long way baby.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

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