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About Fasting

A friend asked me about fasting,

thus this conversation is born. 

 

"Why leave your belly empty

when there's enough food

for you and me?

 

" A month of fasting

is nothing compared

to the years of starving,

felt by one caged

in poverty."

 

"Where lies the need

to feel other's sufferings?

Surely that's madness indeed."

 

"It is not insane

to embrace compassion,

with nothing lost, much to gain.

Truly, selfishness is poison.

 

Fasting is not just to refrain

from eating and drinking.

It is to practice patience,

tolerance and cleansing

one's action from sinning.

 

It is to support humanity

with graceful kindness.

The strong aiding the needy

in the spirit of togetherness.

 

When its time to end a day's fasting,

strangers gather to feast as equals.

The bond between them strengthening

in their devotion to the religion."

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Wise words indeed, and simply and clearly expressed. I wish I could be as altruistic as this, but I grew up as practically an only child because my brother was much older than me, so I learnt to be rather selfish I'm afraid, and however hard I try it's very difficult to change.
Best wishes,
Robert.

You will change the moment you find love because to love someone is to share your heart, your time, your dream and your commitment. Everyone wants to be loved and the only way to gain it is b offering love itself. Therein itself
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Alid

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You have perfectly captured the spirit of Ramadan with your words !!

I wished to find another way to show the conversation without using "I/he said" used alternatively and it could only be done with the advanced format if you can use the italics for one and non italic for the other.

I especially liked the second stanza.

A month of fasting
is nothing compared
to the years of starving,
felt by one caged
in poverty

and

When its time to end a day's fasting,
strangers gather to feast as equals.
the bond between them strengthening
in their devotion to the religion

Thanks for sharing !

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I've been asked about fasting by non-muslims many times. In turn it gives me the idea for this poem. Wil do the edits later. Right now I'll be preparing for Subuh prayer before I sleep. A little tired after staying up late, looking after mum. Pray for me, sister, that I will have the strength to continue to care for her in her old age. I, myself, are not feeling well of late.

Alid

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be with both of you dear brother.

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Tell me, what do you think about the edited version. Just trying to follow your suggestion.

Alid

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from the stanza breaks, and remove the double space.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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