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Yes,I Shall Wait

Oh my beloved,
As you go off to war,
I shall wait your return
In one piece

I shall be a single teen aged mother
Till your return.
Hopefully, your return
Is not with mournful trumpet call
Or Colours dipped on cobbles bare
As normally many do

Till then I shall await my Love,
For you,
As a widow
At this young age
It wouldn't do

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Nice work! But consider this:

Instead of:
Till you return,
Hopefully, your return

Till your arrival,
Hopefully, your homecomming

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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hope this piece
can also now
be to rest
Amen

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This is good, but I don't understand the last two lines.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

in the repeated edits
the typo over came me
.Thanks for the cute observation
grateful

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A good tale of what many young wives are going through. I agree with Jim about the last 2 lines though..........stan

the typo has been blasted
sorry....
my above remarks do accept
thanks

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Stan ....
Lost in the wilderness of time
you can't be o man
you are the Stan
who always did stand

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thanks Rosy
have a great day
and also to stan convey

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where Stan had gotten to. Good to hear he's OK.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

I am grateful

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