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Enlightenment...

Not every empty space on the canvas needs to be filled
All secrets don't have to be exposed
Not everything written... should be
What I don't know, doesn't always need to be known

What I do know... is that some mysteries should be left
to expose themselves slowly
like artifacts eroded from the sands of time
Fossils from the past, to be found in the future
when I need reassurance that I have lived

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Hi Sir Gee,

"When I need reassurance that I have lived." Wonderful ending for a wonderful oh-so-true poem.

Thank you!

I happened to be introduced to and fell in love with this Michael Blumenthal poem, which yours reminds me of Strange synchronicity.

What I Believe

I believe there is no justice,
but that cottongrass and bunchberry
grow on the mountain.

I believe that a scorpion's sting
will kill a man,
but that his wife will remarry.

I believe that, the older we get,
the weaker the body,
but the stronger the soul.

I believe that if you roll over at night
in an empty bed,
the air consoles you.

I believe that no one is spared
the darkness
and no one gets all of it.

I believe we all drown eventually
in a sea of our making,
but that the land belongs to someone else.

I believe in destiny.
And I believe in free will.

I believe that, when all
the clocks break,
time goes on without them.

And I believe that whatever
pulls us under,
will do so gently.

so as not to disturb anyone,
so as not to interfere
with what we believe in.

~

Michael Blumenthal

~

This came to me after I talked with a passenger in my taxi. They have a girlfriend who wants to know EVERYTHING about them, and the girlfriend insists on telling EVERYTHING about themselves. After a few questions about their relationship, and I was thinking that she sounded very controling, he suddenly said; "You know, I don't think I can live with this rerlationship, she seems like she wants to control EVERYTHING. I will wind up living the life she wants me to, not my own. I am going to break up with her. I hope that he finds happiness, and that he lives. ~ Gee P.S. Thanks for the Blumenthal poem

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"Life is a series of natural and spontaneous changes. Don't resist them - that only creates sorrow. Let reality be reality. Let things flow naturally forward in whatever way they like." Lao Tzu
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

be able to discern the smooth and untroubled path from one that is rocky and full of woe. ~ Gee

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this reads smoothly and elegantly, capturing, corraling, and taming the thought/theme into the service of a spendid poem.... (or something like that)!

Al

Nice to see you here. I will look for your work. ~ Gee

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related to this, and took the time to let me know. Isn't it a grand thing to have people and things to connect with? Especially when they have lasted for more than twenty years. That is the kind of thing that you look back on, and say; "I lived." I will look at losing [time]. Thanks, ~ Gee

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that you have been busy. Hope things are going well with your continuing education. Love to read that poem close to your heart. I haven't been writing much lately, but trying to be more thoughtful when I do.
Been a real up and down period for me, the last couple of weeks. First, they wanted me to work nights again at the taxi co. then they changed their minds,[ largely through the efforts of one of the dispatchers, and my best friend] and I caught a cold from one of my fares a couple of weeks ago, and was fighting that, [which almost turned into pneumonia, and sent me to the E.R.] But things are starting to turn around for the better. Quit smoking AGAIN, [been two weeks], and have Doc. appt. this am. Motorcycle will be ready to put on the road, by the end of this week, just need to get up money for insurance and registration, and I will worry about the paint on the new tank later, I just want to ride it a few days before that. Send me that poem if you will, Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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I haven't been writing much lately, or even reading much, but I will try to catch up on things. I especially want to see what you have been doing. So glad to see that you are still here with us. Say hello to the missus for me. ~ Gee

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Geez, felt this one strongly that is all I can say right about now. A great piece of fine art - your words.

Love Mona

I like to see. That people identify with what I write. It is enough that you read and like my work, I'm not sure that it is fine art, but thanks for saying so. I just like to take the thoughts that occur to me as the result of communing with other people, and try to make poetry with them. If that is art, or what passes for it, I'm glad to make some. Thanks Mona, love ya, ~ Gee

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I follow and agree with your ideas, here. It is nice to have a few empty spaces, they can be peaceful pauses. Not every secret need telling. My favorite lines are:

What I do know... is that some mysteries should be left
to expose themselves slowly, like artifacts eroding from the sands of time
Fossils from the past, to be found in the future
when I need reassurance that I have lived

love, Cat (& eddy)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

Cat [& eddy], I appreciate your saying that those are your fav. lines, because they are mine too. I hope that you and yours have many peaceful pauses in your lives. Love ya, ~ Gee

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and I enjoyed the tune that came forth.

Namaste,

Lenny

_________________________________________
"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

a chord with anyone so as to play some music. Thanks for the read and comment. ~ Geezer

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Erik is always saying that he is glad he has his sculptures still, because he knows he has lived when he sees them, perhaps others will find that here in their poetry, you find it in fossils, or hope someone will in the future perhaps in your fossils?

"like artifacts eroding from the sands of time" ...in the sands, or eroded by the sands of time? And why not make it another line the verses don't have to be identical, it would look neater!
artifacts = artefacts.

I liked the way you put it all, in a shroud of mystery.
Love from queen Anne.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

I changed eroding to eroded, and moved the line. It does look neater! Thank you. Artifact= [according to my Webster's New World Dictionary]. I hope that someone some day will look at something I wrote, painted, photographed or left behind will say; " Hey look at that, there was an interesting person." Love, Sir Gee

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What I do know... is that some mysteries should be left
to expose themselves slowly
like artifacts eroded from the sands of time

!!!

My thoughts, exactly!

love, Cat

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