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Realization of the weaker set
is part of the anatomy
Strength; reserved, is the proper thing
No match, no equal, has been observed

Certainly not this puny mind
nor the weak frame, needing support
Bones of steel, and cool blood
make for a champion

With ease, and a certain aplomb
the opening of doors, and holding them
leaves the impression of courtesy
"Control, is more like it"

Train them for dependence
Give them what they want
Keep a secret of their needs
It's all part of the plan...

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a huge Sci-Fi fan, does that give you a clue? Hee hee ~ Gee

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My x & I (love at both sight for both of us) had a whirlwind summer love affair, by September I left my friends and family and home to move in with him. I'd wonder what happened to the man I fell in love with, and he'd say women are so dumb..it's part of the *charm*.. (yeah like a snake!)..the *conquest*.

He was always charming but then that was his *good* side. lol.

~A

to show the relationship between humankind, and robots. The masterplan of the robots, is to make themselves indispensible to us, doing everything for us... Clues: The weaker [set, not sex], and [Bones of steel, and cool blood]. I do see, however how it could be construed as being about the relationship between man and woman. Hee hee, ~ Gee

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glad you enjoyed it, no matter the perspective. Yes, I used to be the man of steel too! What the hell happened? My batteries are low too, guess they need a recharge. Thanks for the read, and the compliments, ~ As always, ~ Gee

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I'm a dummy too! I thought it was about "love" between humans, too. I reread it to see it from the other point of view and that works for me too. This is different from many of your other style of writes and very enjoyable.

With ease, and a certain aplomb
the opening of doors, and holding them
leaves the impression of courtesy
"Control, is more like it"

love, Cat

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not a dummy! If you would notice, I did say that I didn't want to give away the true plot. It was meant to give the impression of either point of view. Maybe I should have given a couple of better clues, but I didn't want to influence the reader to either side. i'm glad that it caused the kind of discussion that it did. That was my intent. Love ya, ~ Gee

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