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On departure of a friends spouse…
thanks all
it’s a sad day today
but all your appreciations
make way
and
sweet smiles I now
once again display
life's mission is so
that's all we know,
people come and people go
when who will come
we perhaps, may know
but who's to go
Heaven alone knows...
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
judyanne
Mon, 2012-10-22 01:03
i read this a few times
at first read i felt it trite
but as i read it over i really got a strong emotion of total acceptance, and i liked it more and more
only one suggestion
'but who goes'
i would make
'but who's to go'
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Mon, 2012-10-22 04:15
Thanks Judy
done
with your valid suggestion
loved