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On departure of a friends spouse…

thanks all
it’s a sad day today
but all your appreciations
make way

and

sweet smiles I now
once again display

life's mission is so
that's all we know,
people come and people go

when who will come
we perhaps, may know
but who's to go
Heaven alone knows...

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Comments

at first read i felt it trite
but as i read it over i really got a strong emotion of total acceptance, and i liked it more and more

only one suggestion
'but who goes'
i would make
'but who's to go'

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

done
with your valid suggestion

loved

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