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HOUSEHOLD CHORES

There things that only women do
Some men boast of what they can do
Do not laugh at what I have to say
How would you describe a normal day?
Let us divide the chores in the household
See what portion you may claim to hold
Who does the cleaning and sweeping?
Who does the cooking and washing?
Lest, on menial things, the master’s time is wasted
For such, the children’s usefulness is tested
Is it the woman who runs the house?
While the man claims to own the house
Is it the man who deceives the woman?
Or the woman, in pretension, fools the man
Who buys the food and pay the bills?
Household chores, like roadmap on the hills
Tasked the woman to work and walk
While the man hangs around in past time talk
Pretending to read or with friends, playing games
Lazy old fool, I do not want to call you names.

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droll - amusing in a quaint or odd manner; comical.

The rhyme goes part way but the content feels like serious social commentary, at least to me. Maybe my funny bone is switched off tonight.

It might work better with some of the bawdy jokes women make about men's pretensions to control.

cheers,
Jess
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or attempt to make the content more amusing. Remember comedy can be a powerful tool for social awareness raising and is particularly appropriate for rhyme.

cheers,
Jess
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