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only
winter
nothing left
from my garden
only
it is not
how I see it
wet stones
remember
green abundance
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Comments
raj
Mon, 2018-02-19 15:26
What a coincidence. Just now
What a coincidence. Just now i posted a Sunku based on Winter making way to summer. Yours is more crisp with all aesthetics.
raj (sublime_ocean)
IRiz
Mon, 2018-02-19 16:08
Thank you, we do often think
Thank you, we do often think alike.
IRiz
Rula
Tue, 2018-02-20 02:38
Beautiful
Love it!!!
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IRiz
Tue, 2018-02-20 08:32
Thank you
Thank you
IRiz
weirdelf
Tue, 2018-06-05 04:11
Now this strikes me as the epitome
of what you seemed to wish to achieve with the sunku form,
Wistful and elegant.
cheers,
Jess
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IRiz
Tue, 2018-06-05 09:57
Hi Jess!
Hi Jess!
What a great way for me to start my morning.
Thank you for your comment.
When I wrote the words the little plot of land on a steep hill behind my house was a bare red clay with a few sticks and twigs. I placed a few rocks here and there in the idea of Zen garden.
I watched the drops of rain water splashing and jumping off of them and wrote this poem.
Now it is completely green almost foaming.
Deers leave hoof prints so I know they visit, but the plants are growing so fast that I can't see what deer damaged.
I also saw a snake, chipmunks, blue Jeys, red Cardinals and a bunch of dragonflies.
Have a good night!!!
IRiz
lovedly
Tue, 2018-06-05 12:05
I also saw a snake, chipmunks, blue Jeys, red Cardinals and a ..
I also saw a snake,
chipmunks, blue Jeys, red Cardinals and a bunch of
dragonflies.
take care
the Sunku will help u in making/Breeding a zoo
then more sunkus wll issue
IRiz
Tue, 2018-06-05 12:36
Cool
Cool
IRiz
lovedly
Tue, 2018-06-05 15:55
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unintended my regrets
Iriz
IRiz
Tue, 2018-06-05 16:08
:)
:)
IRiz
lovedly
Tue, 2018-06-05 15:57
apologies
sorry meant it in a friendly way