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Wake up call
Birthday.
Every year
white flowers.
Am I
dreaming? I
can't be that happy !
Phone rings.
Now I know.
My life is real.
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Comments
lonlyhrtsclub13
Sun, 2018-02-25 20:45
I feel
The dread that comes with every birthday, then a moment where you forget life's troubles...only to be brought back to reality.
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"
IRiz
Sun, 2018-02-25 23:53
Actually, I like birthdays
Actually, I like birthdays and usually feel so happy that can't not believe that I am not dreaming, but this time I had some news and realized that my life is not a dream but a real thing with pain.
IRiz
raj
Mon, 2018-02-26 03:38
The two comments by Carrie
The two comments by Carrie and IRiz are testimony of how the reader perceives the words differently which is one of the expected outcomes I think of a good Sunku...
raj (sublime_ocean)
chevyvent
Mon, 2018-02-26 18:50
Life is certainly real great write
Was encouraged to read this piece three times slowly. You have masterful words puts a smile on my face very real & emotional. The line about can't be happy is so very real and true. I'm a fan of yours and wish you the best of luck in your writings.
Mario Vitale
weirdelf
Mon, 2018-02-26 23:02
Superb
https://vocaroo.com/i/s0ZBI3GplmfJ
cheers,
Jess
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