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Pathos

The naked girl wiped semen
off her lower lip,
the man yanked his belt
and buckled.
The naked girl smelled
her middle finger tip,
the man tied the laces
of his shoes.
The naked girl twisted
a lock of her hair,
the man clipped on his watch
and checked the time.
The naked girl sank low her head
and clapped her feet,
the man had just closed the door.

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Having read books of illicit crime
romance and chaos
this one is a hard one too even
read...as the too real reality
evolves...
my head is not in the sand
of awareness or reality
the world is all about us
with its horrid horrors
and the want too keep
abreast of the joys

detailing is accurate
a scene transpired
transpiring

poetry is observance
of story

thank U!

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