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Mindfull...
Sinuous as any snake
the tendrils of temptation
Sweet frosting on the cake
Having more than you can eat
and saving some for later
Something you can't beat
Fermentation of dreams come true
Wishes almost fulfilled
but not for every man's view
Oh, what wonders I can dream
here in my solitude... my space
The milk above the cream
Safe in the mind, no one can hear
the screams of suffocation
No sound will reach your ear
Complacent in your reverie
you look here
But you don't see the real me
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Ian.T
Mon, 2014-07-14 04:11
Gee
A disguise that shows the real man.
Great piece of false trails there young'un, still we never know who is there standing next to us in physical being or just words.
Loved this one, this one that is hidden in plain view is the one that has to answer all the questions later.
Go well young Gee, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geezer
Mon, 2014-07-14 11:05
Yes, the mind...
Does play it's little games. You are right you never know who is standing next to you!
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