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Positively negative

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2014-04-14 12:16

See not only the dark side of life
there is more brightness
than what one can visualize ...

just see the positive side...
and smile .....
darkness is just for a while

so the longer part of day
in broad day light do smile

just don't in the darkness of life while
friend smile
see me
Smile!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Mon, 2014-04-14 19:32

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If it were not for darkness,
what would there be
to judge the light that you walk toward.
A good write young Bard I hope to see more of these from you,
Yours as always Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Tue, 2014-04-15 01:50

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I am just a candle
how can it be shown
to the sun
by anyone...

loved

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alidzain

Tue, 2014-04-15 17:52

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be it a candle
or the sun
light is often appreciated
when darkness comes
if that is untrue
then we won't see the moon
in the contrast of colours
its beauty won't bloom

Alid

loved

Wed, 2014-04-16 03:14

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blindness
thanks for ur composition

loved

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