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Zephyr

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the dungeon boiler sun
through slatted shadows
haunt
runs ruinous angles
The chevron pack of
filtered butts
tucked tidy

slacks and polished shoes
re soled
still sporting a fedora
though the looks are
changing
Tail fins and loud
planes from the salt
flat airport
Stock the Desota
hit the turnpike for
the quota
Newsboy calling out
the words
"Hot off the press"
and the neon fire
like dragon blood
will gleam
for the night club
hipster jazz lover
machines
in their heeled
hose and calve
run gams
The little mole
at the quirk of
a mouth
and the shot
of gin to the stubble
of a chin by
sterling flask
in a casual suit
The paperback
thumbed through
making its round
with the sports
whom pencil in
their names
like the bookies
at the end of
the morning shifts
and enormous
winds humid and
hot tipping hats
and flinging up
dresses
like a thrill a minute
ride on the island

The zippo fires up
in a flick learnt
from a woman
I chummed with
and the draw on
the coffin nail
fills my head with
magic and all
the madness
melts away
while we guard
the car waiting
for the others
to show
for the great
road tour
west
...

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this very tender and febrile imager , exquisite

A great piece I wish that more of our people would leave comments, don't know what's wrong with them or are they just reading and have no opinions.
Take care, Yours Ian..

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Like a song....I used to put in jukebox tunes
before my cars had casettes even..
too cheap and poor to be bothered to tear
it all out and I liked stock...Pick that way..

I read books too and just have no real
comment...they are too vivid or surreal
like a dream forgotten upon awakening
...

A lot of this writing is far out there..
I could sucessfully write mid...
probably..

but I like these..

Thank for the comment!

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Your ability to write as you do also your ability to write in similar terms is just you, don't change, your pieces are a challenge to the mind, and at my age I need a challenge lol
Go well, Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I enjoy my slant on the output mode of writing!
I Love prose too....Dont get me wrong...
I read Milton!! and loved shakeaspeare
There is the magic of the order of words

Maybe why some sects fear the power of
chants..or dances....Maybe why gov's in past
remove poets....

We are a charming dandy lot!

Thank You!

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I think the difference Twix chant and your works is that chant will brainwash you where your positive words will awaken the thoughts,
Take care young wolf it is a time of plenty once again, Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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