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Winter To my Summer Heart

a new image of life fell down from the clouds
as it drop the sweet touch of silver snow,
peace,kindness,love........ - all's reborn..all pure..
from the charity of heaven lending me a sweet sacrifice...

the gravity of falsehood and the destruction of morals
had eaten half of my soul but with the chance to feel the winter,
i felt rebirth to be better and stronger..
without - i could have been dead and numb..

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A lovely name, and as your words are a tribute to the gentle fall of snow in its whiteness.
I haven't enough time to read more of your works but you stir a beauty here in these two parts.
In the first part you have put "drop the sweet" should it be Dropped the sweet.
Take care and keep writing, Yours, Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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