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Who Are We

I cry for you out there,
You have become my friends.
Where are all the good things gone?
More pain to my soul does it never end

My choice to feel the way I do
Yet it is just me there walking
I then choose to walk with you
The twirling universe goes on

Dipping into mankind’s pain,
A poet’s simple refrain
I am here they call, just talk to me
A lifeline stretching out

There I find you and love you all,
It is for me to be flawed.
Though I feel we all should be
Compassionate for us, you see.

Are these roles we take on?
A task we have chosen.
Does the task choose us?
As we meander life’s pathway so.

Come tell me true of what to do
Shake your thoughts, I also need
So when do I tell of my needs
Is it when all yours are gone?

Then I shall return to my crying
I saved it for me in my room
There alone muddled thoughts return
I wonder, Shall I stay as I am?

I have thought and answered so
It is better that you do not know
So I can tend to my tasks each day
In my abstract kind of way.

Where were we, oh yes?
I shall help you clear a pathway,
That leads to happiness,
Give me a second, to dry my eyes

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
This is a fiction write I am fine but in this day and age of the net it can happen over and over again, Yours Ian
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Comments

we are nothing
beyond poetry

loved

lonely as a poet,
did loved like it,
because he didn't show it,
Amongst the quills of many writers,
I wandered and wondered,
and then wondered still.
Doth he know I wonder,
Or will we always wonder
At what he doth wonder still.

Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

author comment

You will have to give me a moment to dry my eyes...... this is heartfelt and it feels like it was autobiographical but as you said above it is a fictional write, I thoroughly enjoyed it hun,I can see nothing that needs to be changed this felt very personal.

with love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

That it is a fictional write today tomorrow as the sun climbs it may be me thinking that way as I sometimes do.
I remember Jess saying it is better to write of things you know or have experience of, who knows how each of us feels unless they stand there with them??? May be I can travel with the children lol, Take care and have a lovely weekend.
Yours Ian xx and the children

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

author comment

after having read comments
but Ian we are not yet established as aliens

once we are able to make a city
on Moon and Mars
and get used to the atmosphere there
after many die in thin air
then when we establish
that we can establish

then some bright lad
like me will say
see I told you we all are aliens by the way
and so Ian till then do stay
and accept we may be once upon a times aliens

just by the universes side way
a dark tunnel in time
they call a holocaust
may be we all were truly then cast
if I compose any more than this
you will call me an epicurial
admix

loved

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