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Vial

Submitted by Esker on Mon, 2015-11-09 21:24

in the room
a rose under glass
stories bound
to page in a book
turn the cover
one must
look

winter winds
howl like
pack of wolves

...

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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eightmenout

Tue, 2015-11-10 11:14

Your writing seems to be evolving, morphing into different images. I hope you enjoy the adventure, the risks and adrenaline that comes as a "friend with benefits" to change.

Scott

Esker

Wed, 2015-11-11 10:33

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benifit of change....much there of this.. roles made for the right mixture to play
only feel like im living when i know i might be dying

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Pugilist

Tue, 2015-11-10 21:12

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I've said it before, but it bears repeating, you have a lyrical voice in your poems and I thoroughly appreciate your talent.

With this piece, I like the way I am led through the story and the ending is a good juxtaposition to the introduction.

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Jonathan Moore

Esker

Wed, 2015-11-11 10:35

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finding that voice was brutally hard
and ive paid for it...wow..over and over
but glad u like it
this one was short
a lot like the older works were too

thanks

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ThEdges

Wed, 2015-11-11 20:40

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of your poems, but I've never seen you write one so short. This is very good.

Best always,
Laura

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