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VENERABLE

Submitted by Esker on Sat, 2016-03-12 13:14

Prism lidded steps
descend
into the damp
into the hold
upon the deep
doth waters clear
and purest creep
and above the
womb of stars
above the temper
of the giants
the stars
do sleep

...

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Sparrow

Sat, 2016-03-12 19:01

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This is a lovely piece of your thoughts, that the stars do sleep, I wonder if we can drift among those beings as we will be.
Take care young Wolf we have much to talk of and many miles to journey here,
Yours as always Ian..

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lovedly

Sat, 2016-03-12 20:36

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how did you
or could you
mange to be so
succinctly brief

Esker

Sun, 2016-03-13 18:12

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time is the essence of late
and soon....very limited
time for writing at all
no comp acess
which I need
I need a break from the public
slink back into the forest of
myself
spring rains will be here soon
more walks
and less talks

I still have a computer I can use
but not like every other day
once a week
possible or second week
or three

Im going back to reading books
watch television more again
pick up a cd and buy the cheaper
music from the hock stores...
its time...
been a heck of a run since 2007
nine hell of a long years
good...up down....
and all around...
Mr Esker

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lovedly

Sun, 2016-03-13 20:47

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f 9
Mr Esker
shine
LIKE an 'aurum'
mine
I an dark as a coal mine
no drinkers
of wine
of mine
So I bask
in the land divine
unlike a bovine
I simply dine
in line
always thinking of night time nine
twine
am a
sign like a sine

what more to say of poetry of mine!

eightmenout

Thu, 2016-03-17 00:27

I hope what I am reading here does not mean that you won't be writing. There's no need for a computer. Only paper and pen. Finger in sand. Rock scratching on rock. Even if we can't see it, it will make its way into the wind and continuing to inspire all of those who know to take a deep breath in.

Enjoy your hiatus. Thanks for the years.

Scott

Geezer

Thu, 2016-03-17 14:12

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my friend. I know your time will be limited on the computer, but I do hope that when you get that time you will continue to share with us. I have been honored to learn some things from you and put them to use. Your streaming has been particularly helpful to me in the last weeks in the writing of material remembered from my childhood. I am continuing to use those lessons as I write more of those memories and hope that you have enjoyed what I have done so far. Please don't just disappear, let us know how you fare. I am always interested. ~Your friend, ~ Gee.

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Esker

Thu, 2016-03-17 16:40

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I have wireless where I want too go...all funding gov...prov..help gets through this month..
so I can use an old laptop...and a lcd screen and presto..Be back connected again! thank
U for the comments and I will continue to write!!
mr esker

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