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In Trusion..........

Submitted by Esker on Sun, 2016-02-28 15:59

we drive our trucks
slip our arms
our fingers
arms inside
your robes
we are
the intrusion

looking for
the numerical
impossible

...

thank U

let us settle in the
garden of dust

..

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Sun, 2016-02-28 19:13

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I like the simplicity of this one, is there a problem with the flow of these lines:-
slip our arms
our fingers
arms inside..
Take care and look after you,
I would like you to reconsider putting a piece forward for the Neopoet book,
without your write there will be a great space in there, Please, Please.
Yours as always, Ian

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lovedly

Mon, 2016-02-29 16:02

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with a willing woman
am I right Sir Esker

Seren

Fri, 2016-03-04 14:23

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I read it enough times to form many different ideas on it .. enjoyed it as per the norm my friend

bravo !!

Always a pleasure to read your work there is no one quite like you

Love Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Esker

Mon, 2016-03-07 09:56

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might be awhile lbefoe I am on again! will miss U all!
mr wolf

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