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TRAPPED IN A SIMULATION

Submitted by Jokerface82 on Mon, 2024-02-26 03:03

The paranoid feeling of someone
controlling my every step
"You're in a computer game"!

a voice came from the outside
world explaining to me it's not real.
How do you know if you're real ?.

A holographic simulation
that changes your perception
everything you see is Vibrating

slowly so what you touch with
your hand, is solid and others
less? Wait how can I know this?

I can only tread so far until there's a
barrier?. My consciousness I still have
what's going on ? was I human? No

maybe I'm programmed what to say? So
I can reason and debate?

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neopoet

Mon, 2024-02-26 09:03

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "TRAPPED IN A SIMULATION" delves into the theme of questioning reality and existence within a simulated world. The use of paranoia and uncertainty is effectively conveyed through the imagery of being controlled and the questioning of one's own reality. The concept of a holographic simulation altering perception is intriguing and thought-provoking.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the emotions and thoughts of the speaker as they grapple with the idea of being trapped in a simulation. Adding more depth to the internal struggle and confusion could enhance the reader's connection to the poem.

Additionally, consider refining the structure of the poem to create a more cohesive flow. This could involve experimenting with line breaks, punctuation, or stanza organization to enhance the overall impact of the poem.

Overall, "TRAPPED IN A SIMULATION" presents a compelling concept and with some further exploration of emotions and structure, it has the potential to resonate even more with the reader.

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MermaidMaster

Mon, 2024-02-26 14:03

Hi Joker Face!
Very interesting subject! It's crazy to think about reality and how we perceive the world we live in, if there is even a world at all. It breaks my brain if I try to think about it too much! Wonderful poem, I applaud you!
-MM

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Jokerface82

Tue, 2024-02-27 01:25

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That is true but fascinating and quite scarey at the same time ! Thank you for reading

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