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Time has age me

Time has age me since paper was put to pen
Walking through life in more rain filled question
Why does it sing out with the poetry that I cannot omit
Time has age me since paper was put to pen

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Great to see you, it's been a while.

A very effective and rather poignant poem.

I think it would be improved by using more correct (traditional?) grammar.

Time has age me [aged]

Time has age me since paper was put to pen [aged]
Walking through life in more rain filled question
[Walking through life in rain filled questioning
or
Walking through life in rain filled questions]
Why does it sing out with the poetry that I cannot omit
Time has age me since paper was put to pen [aged]

I like the inversion of putting paper to pen.
Cool comeback, mate.

cheers,
Jess
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Jess has found all the small grammatical things, so all I have to do is comment on the theme, great, great, piece and no wasted words,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- Haven't forgotten you lol.

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Long time no see (it's me hardcorechick28). Glad to see you are back and writing again. Your poem was short but made perfect sense. It seems like we change with every piece we write and as time goes on, our writing changes to reflect that changes within us, if that makes sense...good to see you.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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