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a thought in flight
a thought in flight pauses
on its panting path
to touch a pensive mind
the rushing notion
defies the mocking ripples
of many words' estuary
cascades vehemently along
till it ponds in solitude
lost in the obscurity
of a verbal world
the thought slowly turns
into a crafty alphabet
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Comments
weirdelf
Sun, 2014-07-06 20:14
Gorgeously crafted
and thoughtful piece.
You are a master word-crafter, sir.
My only crit perhaps shows in the stumble in my reading.
perhaps
the thought turns slowly
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/a-thought-in-flight-submitted
cheers,
Jess
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nokros
Mon, 2014-07-07 11:40
thanx
for dropping by Jess... appreciate.