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I was with a woman
some time ago, who wore her love
like a pistol on her hip.
With her suspicious heart for ammunition,
one inevitable wrong move by me
and I was going to be done for.
Pretty soon I stopped
trying to avoid her aim.
She had already put holes
where we needed to breathe.
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MermaidMaster
Tue, 2024-02-20 10:13
you’ve done it again!! Every
you’ve done it again!! Every poem I’ve read is far of yours has me transfixed. I love the metaphor you used here!
my favorite line is:
wore her love
like a pistol on her hip.
Thank you for sharing!
-MM
<3
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2024-02-21 11:49
Very kind MM - thank you and
Very kind MM - thank you and appreciate your comments!
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Michael Anthony
author commentCandlewitch
Tue, 2024-02-20 10:45
Dear Michael,
That is one smokin' Hot woman!!! keep her in front of you, let her take the lead, lol!
*hugs, Cat
*ever, eddy
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Michael Anthony
Wed, 2024-02-21 11:49
Hahaha - accurate! Best
Hahaha - accurate!
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Michael Anthony
author commentGeezer
Wed, 2024-02-21 16:25
So nice of her...
Yeah, they don't aim for killing shots or specific targets, they just squeeze off a few rounds ever so often, in the general vicinity of anything they think might be a threat. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Thu, 2024-02-22 10:36
Although, her aim was nothing
Although, her aim was nothing to be ignored - LOL! Thanks for stopping by Geez!
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Michael Anthony
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