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Submitted by Michael Anthony on Thu, 2024-03-28 10:40

“I hope I die before you”, she worries.
“I don't want to be alone.”

“But you'll have the two dogs and some family.
Besides, I'll need you to host my Celebration of Life,
and read a poem for me. Maybe this one.
And play the music I liked for everyone;
maybe tell a joke or two, so things don’t get too somber.”

“But you won't be there.”

“Yeah, more or less, that's how I see it too my love.”

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sat, 2024-03-30 09:26

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I haven’t been around for a bit but I do remember you have the knack for this. I for one like it. I’m a fan of Vonnegut and your style has some faint echos of his conversational style.

Nice work
Tim

Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-04-02 09:36

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Thanks Tim. Appreciate the comparison to Vonnegut, and glad you liked this piece.

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Candlewitch

Sun, 2024-03-31 08:41

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Steven and I have had this conversation, too! after much badgering, He has promised to let me die first! great poem, love the style!

*hugs, Cat

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Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-04-02 09:37

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LOL! Same here with Shelly and I. Thanks for stopping by.

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Lavender

Mon, 2024-04-01 15:52

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Hello, Michael,
A tender and lighthearted approach to talk about such a hard topic. The title lends a gentle bit of humor, too.
Thank you!
L

Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-04-02 09:38

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Thank you L!

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MermaidMaster

Mon, 2024-04-01 16:40

Michael,
what a delightful poem! I love the conversational style and the way you so beautifully mix humorous and endearing dialogue. Gorgeous gorgeous gorgeous!
-MM

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Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-04-02 09:41

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Thank you MM! I was definitely trying to approach the topic without being morose. Really appreciate your comments!

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