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sweet little flock

Submitted by Esker on Fri, 2012-06-22 15:42

they crowd to mock
the crying drama
the soul shock

they want to rock
the stone of words
shatter hearts
and stifle souls

the life that leaves
pressed out with
words

sticks and stones
break more then
bones

Last few words: 
stop bullying eliminate bullies!
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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judyanne

Sat, 2012-06-23 11:53

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'sticks and stones
break more then
bones' - do you mean 'than' rather than 'then'?

a different style than your normal somehow esker
- i mean form-wise, the text has your usual depth

i've noticed a lot of bullying incidents being reported in the media lately - i wonder if this is because it is escalating, or if attention is being drawn more to it - i do hope it is the latter

nothing to crit re the write - as usual it is powerful

oh btw - awesome title
love judy
xxx

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Esker

Sat, 2012-06-23 16:35

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Then it was the time...If it were a time other Than this...
always get that mixed up Judy

Im tired of bullying all legalities now
Kids that bully know what they can do and get away with
and teachers cannot be what they were in the past either
There were psychos that could get away with horrors
men and women

and the grey area is the kids who just want to live
and with Facebook hounding there is no respite
Parents cant just look up the troublemakers and have
a talk Everyone just cries harrassment
so it just goes on and on and the kids kill themselves
the bullies dont care either way

my time I fought back My way
people got the message

Humanity has been messing on each other
for years and years
it will never stop

this is just my poem against it

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loved

Sat, 2012-06-23 12:09

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today a message for you.

''This universe has no beginning,
no end
that we mortals can claim knowledge of...'''
Loved

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