The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "SUN" is an interesting exploration of the sensory experiences associated with sunlight. The use of rich, tactile imagery such as "warm golden shower," "melting whirlpool of chocolate," and "butter golden spears of light" effectively evokes a sense of warmth and comfort. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of metaphor and simile.

For example, the first stanza uses a simile ("felt like a melting whirlpool of chocolate"), while the second stanza uses a metaphor ("butter golden spears of light"). Consistency in this aspect could enhance the overall coherence and impact of the poem.

The poem also employs a variety of adjectives ("warm," "golden," "toasted") to describe the sun. While these descriptors contribute to the sensory richness of the poem, they could potentially be streamlined to avoid redundancy and enhance the poem's focus.

Finally, the phrase "Cupid arrows of toasted love" is somewhat ambiguous. If the intention is to convey the sun's rays as arrows of love, this could be made clearer. Alternatively, if the intention is to introduce a new metaphor (Cupid's arrows), this could be developed further to enhance its impact and relevance to the overall theme of the poem.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively uses sensory imagery to evoke the warmth and comfort of sunlight, it could benefit from more consistent use of metaphor and simile, streamlined use of adjectives, and clearer or more developed metaphors.

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Cupid arrows of toasted love? Sounds a little bit...
Anyway, once I got the idea, it all gelled together. ~ Geezer.
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A hint of romance in this one. Golden showers, melting whirlpools of chocolate, toasted love sets the stage...There is a typo with the word Chocolate. Other than that..well done.