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Some Sad Dark Secret

‘Temper your enthusiasm,’
She said,
‘The extremes of your reactions;
You should have
A more conventional frame
On which to hang
Your unconventionality.’
‘Don’t push people,’
She said,
‘You make yourself vulnerable.’

Was I hiding
Some sad
Dark secret from the world?

She told me not to rhapsodise,
That it would be difficult,
Impossible, perhaps,
For me to harness my dynamism.
The tone of my work,
She said,
Is often a little dubious.
She said
She thought
That there was something wrong.

As if I was hiding
Some sad
Dark secret from the world.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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'Some Sad Dark Secret' was inspired by words spoken to me by a former tutor and mentor of mine at university in London, as well as my own reflections on them in the shape of makeshift journal entries. She passed in 2008, I am proud to say I spoke at her funeral, and she was laid to rest in the churchyard of St Martin’s Church, Bladon, close by to the grave of Sir Winston Churchill, who was the subject of one of her published books. Thank you, Margaret.
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Was I was hiding.....typo?
Some sad
Dark secret from the world

How very interesting that she saw something so deep within you, maybe without her words you wouldn't have a book? Most lovely that you give her a place in your heart.

Thank you...Teddy

Thanks, Teddy, I have posted this piece a good few times over the years, yes years, and never noticed that typo! yes, she did, and that is perhaps so, she believed in me as a writer and thinker with a fierce passion, one day I might fulfill something of the faith she had in me, and yes she sure does, and always will. Carl.

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“Right, Right, You’re Bloody Well Right.” Or maybe the “ The Logical Song” even more. I guess this is you defending you against the swelling tides. I like it.

I know the song you mean, 'Bloody Well Right', I bought that album way back in the day, 'The Logical Song' was later, but another good song by a great band, and yes I agree with that definition, spot on, I love it. Carl.

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