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S u b s t i t u t i o n e t t e

drain ovid drinks
the hungry flurry
flung thicket wrung
in humid spears
lightning spun

moaning in depths
drowned demarcated
the flare of light
stalled out beneath
damp wet kisses

black velvet ossuary
blotting out the
eyes of stars
the grave of souls

into the void
like ribbons
of redeeming

every toss
a worry
every turn
a loss

upon oceans
the dark glide
of wind

the sliver
of a ghosts
behind the mirrors
bright and fleeting
like the sleek
flung precipitate

like bad ideals

Editing stage: 


This one seeks out the unseen
Thought can drift the oceans ways
Thought can traverse the waves
Washing the velvet of the night
Dimming those stars into submission.
Memories searing the flesh
taking another journey
Feeling the hurts of oneness
Fear not to join once again
The noise of actions
Yet keeping those thoughts

I hope I have read this OK young man
It held my thoughts in a velvet vice,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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