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s u b p e o n i c i o u s

dark nay drawn blank
thick as the ice against a bank
i remember colors heavy and droll
and that wind light with cirrus like
winters collar neath a hood
soft stoll
decorum factum

while a river of purpose
spreads like a stain
on the ancient stretch
an open world
seeping translucent
a happiness

you and i were
once upon
its time

a scene of a crime
like a starburst

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A story within a story with a title that is a google first again.
This is one way to advertise your works.
I liked the wording of the second stanza it had a beauty of its own.
That you and I were once upon its time completed its implication.
Take care out there,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

After seeing Ian's comment I googled your title and sure enough your poem was at the top of the list!

What a lovely poem this is. lavish with imagery - I agree with Ian about the second stanza and I love the phrase a starburst blare!

Love Mand xxxxxx

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